More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items from famous brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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There has been much debate
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people
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should choose famous
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to buy clothes and other things.
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new trend is a direct consequence of strong advertising campaigns from huge companies and influencers. In my
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tendency is bound to destroy smaller businesses and can bring more negative consequences than positive ones. First and foremost, big companies in order to make profits promote their shiny products through intense advertisements, with the help of various influencers, celebrities and famous sportsmen.
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leads to more and more
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choosing between sellers based on the ads they see on the internet or other social media platforms. in order to follow the new trends brought by celebrities.
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, the famous football player Ronaldo promotes
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shoes of famous
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, which,
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, many of his followers will buy.
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trend most definitely will have a negative impact on society and most importantly, small businesses that are desperately looking for new customers.
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is because smaller
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are not able to allocate big budgets to advertisements and
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are less known.
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, society will not be informed about the products these smaller companies sell and will not be able to buy them.
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, some
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may feel unsatisfied with their lives, when they are not able to afford lavish products from famous
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.
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, they may end up depressed or negatively impacted in other ways.
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, individuals could struggle with financial problems when they spend all of their budget on popular
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, which often cost a staggering amount of money. In conclusion, a lot of
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buy from famous
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for many different reasons.
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, I strongly believe that
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is a negative development
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because it can lead to bankruptcy of small businesses and issues with
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’s mental and financial state.
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