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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Newspapers
 and
books
 are losing their popularity now. There is a statement that some
newspapers
 or
books
 will not be used because people can read everything online without spending money. I personally disagree with
this
 statement for strong reasons. Admittedly, not everyone can afford
themselves
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to buy phones, because they
cost
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are
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 more expensive than
books
 or
newspapers
. It is more comfortable for people to buy a newspaper and read the news of the day
,
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 than buy a telephone, which cannot be used forever. Another reason is
health
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the health
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 issues that new technologies usually cause. In
this
case
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 it refers to our
eye-sight
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eyesight
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. We know that the phones which we use every day
has
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have
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 rays. These rays are very dangerous and can affect our
health
 very badly. As we know, more money is needed to solve the
health
 problem.
Last
 but not least, reading
books
 is more comfortable.
Books
 have an emotional and sentimental value that cannot be replaced by digital media.
Moreover
, the act of holding a physical book, flipping through its pages and smelling the scent of paper is an integral part of the reading experience.
To sum up
, it is true that technology has made
easier
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it easier
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 to access information online, but I think physical
books
 and
newspapers
 will continue to hold a special place in people’s bookcases and in their hearts. Many people cannot afford
themselves
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to buy a technological device. It can cause serious
health
 problems and of
course
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course,
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 the act of holding a physical book means everything
for
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to
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 me.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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