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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. » You should write at least 150 words. » You should not spend more than 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. » You should write at least 150 words. » You should not spend more than 20 minutes on this task.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of different transport
system
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systems
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 by
public
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the public
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 used in 1960, 1980 and 2000 in one European city.
Overall
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, in 2000, the figure showed
the
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an
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 upward trend
of
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for
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car
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cars
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,
While
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bike
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bikes
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 and
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foot
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feet
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 experienced
downward
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a downward
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 trend.
On the other hand
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, there is
fluctuation
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a fluctuation
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 in Bus transportation. Looking at the car statistics, it was 6% in 1960,
then
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 rapidly rose to 25% in 1980 and
continue
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continued
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grew
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to grow
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 till 2000 which was about 36%.
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, there is decreasing in
popularity
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the popularity
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 of
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bike
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bikes
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 and
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foot
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footwear
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. In 1960, the proportion of commuters
for
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by
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bike
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 and
foot
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revealed
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was
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 almost 27% and 35% respectively,
then
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 both displayed going down to about 7% for
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bike
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bikes
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 which was
lowest
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the lowest
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 point in 2000 and 10%
for
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on
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foot
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 in 2000.
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, The variation showed in bus commuters, which was 20% in 1960,
then
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 reached up to almost 27% in 1980 and went down by 10% in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bike, foot with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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