The diagram below gives the information about the Hawaiian island chain in the centre of the Pacific Ocean. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below gives the information about the Hawaiian island chain in the centre of the Pacific Ocean. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown. Write at least 150 words.
The map illustrates
about
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the formation of
Hawaiian
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the Hawaiian
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island chain in the Pacific
Ocean
through
series
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of geographical events. It can be seen that in the present
times
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there are five major
island
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, which have been developed from multiple eruption processes within
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the pacific
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pacific
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plates. Comprises of eight major islands namely Hawaii, Maui, Kahoolawe, Lanai, Molokai, Oahu, Kauai and Niihau, the collection of Hawaiian archipelagos in the Pacific
Ocean
was
initially
marked by the formation of the volcanic mountain 80 million years ago. Through a consecutive series of eruptions that
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occurred at
the
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depth of 2,883 kilometres beneath the sea surface, they eventually
form
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several Hawaiian islands. Specifically, the eruption takes place in the solid dense rock area which contains the static ‘hot spot’ spume. As the eruption
begin
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numerous
time
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, the hot spot area will
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, resulting in the induction of the magma spume.
Subsequently
, the magma spume will be pushed to the surface until it cracks the
pacific
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plates, which later develops
young
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volcano and
form
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an island. As the Pacific
Ocean
has seven
until
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nine centimetres
movements
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of Pacific plates annually, it
consequently
leads to the shift of the formed islands, which
finally
make them sprawling across the Pacific
Ocean
that can be seen in the present times.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ocean with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • geographical position
  • Pacific Ocean
  • diagram
  • volcanic activity
  • hot spot theory
  • tectonic plate
  • stationary
  • Earth's mantle
  • sequential
  • evolution
  • active volcanism
  • erosion
  • subsidence
  • atolls
  • seamounts
  • topography
  • ecological development
  • significant
  • historical
  • cultural importance
  • ongoing natural processes
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