The chart belows gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018
The
given
bar chart illustrates the average weekly expenditure by families in one country in 1968 and 2008.
Verb problem
apply
Overall
, people spent on food
the most in 1968 while
people in 2008 spent on leisure the most.
To begin
with, in 1968, households spent 35% of their weekly income on food
and it was significantly higher compared to the other categories. Following
this
, the percentage of housing and "clothing and footwear" was a tenth. Subsequently
, other sectors only showed a negligible rate, with below 10%. To be specific, families only spent about 9% on leisure. Moreover
, household goods
, personal goods
, and transport reached about 8%. Lastly
, the least spent sector, "Fuel and power" was approximately 6%.
On the other hand
, the expenditure towards food
decreased by half. Around 17% of weekly income was allocated on
Change preposition
to
food
. However
, the leisure and housing categories gained popularity. The rate was about 22% and 19%, respectively. Furthermore
, the figure for transport also
increased by almost double, to 14%. The percentage for household goods
remained the same. Lastly
, "Fuel and power", "Clothing and furniture", and personal goods
showed a minor allocation.Submitted by aahhyu111 on
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