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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it likes now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it likes now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first diagram depicts the layout of a public library from 20 years ago,
while
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 the second one illustrates the current map after undergoing changes.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 a number of significant developments have taken place during the
last
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 two decades. Notably, the tables and chairs in the middle of the area have been removed, creating a free space, and the café has been replaced with the enquiry desk in the southeast of the map. A computer
room
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 has been erected next to the entrance as a replacement for the reading
room
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, where people could read newspapers and magazines. On the opposite side, a café is constructed with a different design.
In addition
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, the section above the computer
room
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 has been turned into a place for all reference
books
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. Another interesting change has been the enlargement of the northwestern section, making way for the introduction of a
room
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 for fiction
books
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 suitable for children, which can be used for holding storytelling events
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 the existence of adequate sofas.
Furthermore
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, the information desk is put just above the café, between the adult fiction
books
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 and self-service machines.
Finally
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, the children's
books
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 section is made into a lecture
room
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, right in the northeast of the layout.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modern technology
  • computer stations
  • multimedia room
  • multi-purpose spaces
  • conference rooms
  • study spaces
  • community-oriented services
  • accessibility
  • wider aisles
  • ramps
  • designated areas
  • people with disabilities
  • cafeteria
  • coffee shop
  • leisurely space
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