The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
A glance at the graph provides the figures for smoking per one thousand
people
in Someland in 4 decades from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
, the rate
of male smokers decreased in Someland in the given period, whilst that of female one fluctuated.
According to
the information shown in the chart, there were only around 100 female smokers per 1000 females in 1960 while
the rate
of smoking per 1000 men was 6 times higher than that of women’s
. Change noun form
women
However
, the rate
of female smokers experienced a three-times growth from 1960 to 1975 by 100 people
and 300 people
while
the male smoker rate
reduced from 600 people
to 500 people
at the same time.Moreover
, the male smoker rate
plummeted from 600 people
to 250 people
between 1960 and 2000 which was only 50 people
more than the female smoker rate
in 2000. What should be particularly mentioned is that the rate
of women who smoked in Smeland plateaued at 200 women from 1915 to 1980 and kept decreasing after the plateau period which decreased 100
Change preposition
by 100
peope
in the Correct your spelling
people
last
two decades.Submitted by s99104032 on
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