The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
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A glance at the graph provides the figures for smoking per one thousand
people
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in Someland in 4 decades from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
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, the
rate
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of male smokers decreased in Someland in the given period, whilst that of female one fluctuated.
According to
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the information shown in the chart, there were only around 100 female smokers per 1000 females in 1960
while
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the
rate
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of smoking per 1000 men was 6 times higher than that of
women’s
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women
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.
However
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, the
rate
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of female smokers experienced a three-times growth from 1960 to 1975 by 100
people
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and 300
people
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while
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the male smoker
rate
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reduced from 600
people
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to 500
people
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at the same time.
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, the male smoker
rate
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plummeted from 600
people
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to 250
people
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between 1960 and 2000 which was only 50
people
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more than the female smoker
rate
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in 2000. What should be particularly mentioned is that the
rate
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of women who smoked in Smeland plateaued at 200 women from 1915 to 1980 and kept decreasing after the plateau period which decreased
100
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by 100
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peope
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people
in the
last
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two decades.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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