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In the future all cars, bues and trucks will be driverless. The only people traevelling inside these vehichcles will be passengers. Do you think the adventages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
nowadays,
invention
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the invention
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 of
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the auto-vehichel
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auto-vehichel
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auto-vehicle
auto-vehicles
 is
builded
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built
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 in whole the world.many people predict that all
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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transportation tools can
work
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 without human
driver
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drivers
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.
in
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this
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 essay I will explore the pros and cons of
future
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the future
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 of travelling and try to draw some conclusions.
Body · 1
Firstly
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 , when
poeple
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people
 must not drive for travel they can save energy
therefor
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therefore
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 they
work
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 productively at
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the office
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office
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offices
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,
factories
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and factories
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 .for
examply
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example
 in
eroup
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group
 some workers have to drive more than 15 km to
arrive
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reach
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factory
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the factory
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 it is very
exhusted
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exhausting
.
Secoundly
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Secondly
,since many accidents
cause
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 with
humans
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humans'
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 faults when
artifical
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artificial
inteligint
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intelligence
drive
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drives
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instead
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 of
human
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humans
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, there are decrease
about
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in
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accident
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accidents
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 that
very
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are very
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awsome
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awesome
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.
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on the other
hands
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hand
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, many workers
work
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 as drivers in transportation if
gavernment
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the gavernment
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 like to save jobs for
that
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those
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 people
.it
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it
 must think about
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work
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the work
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 and
live
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 of many people.since technology is
first
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revolotion
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revolution
 so many
side
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sides
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 of
this
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work
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is
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are
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 disvitual
.and
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and
 It can be more
difficault
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difficult
 to find a
truth
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true
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 time
to
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when we can use caredfully about
this
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 technology.we need some
exprement
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experiment
 about
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.
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to
counclude
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conclude
,
driveless
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driverless
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 can help
human
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humans
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for
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in
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the futuer
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futuer
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future
 but they have some
fault
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faults
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 and some anxious .there are both positive and
negitive
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negative
 to
this
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 way of working . in spite of the
techonlogy
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technology
 is good
but
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apply
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some
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apply
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times
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sometimes
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 they can't help
human
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humans
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.we must seek about new road
for
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to
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 solve
this
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 problem.

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Task Achievement
Focus on clarifying your main ideas more distinctly. Each paragraph should revolve around a single clear main idea with supporting sentences.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on paragraphing. Ensure each paragraph has a clear opening sentence that signals the topic. This will greatly help with coherence and logical structure.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a wider range of vocabulary to more precisely express your ideas. Avoid overly simple or repetitive words and phrases.
Coherence & Cohesion
Review your essay for grammatical errors and strive for accuracy in your language use. Consider revising sentence structures for clarity.
Task Achievement
Incorporate specific examples to support your main points. These examples should be detailed and relevant to the topic at hand.
Task Achievement
You have successfully addressed both sides of the argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
You made an effort to conclude your essay, summarizing the main points discussed.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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