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The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present.

The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present.
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The two line graphs give information about the comparison of books read by
women
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 and men in Starmouth School Library from 2009 to 2012.
Overall
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, it can be seen that female students spend their time more on reading compared to males.
Furthermore
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, there was a similar
year
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 in which both genders reached the same number of books to read.
To begin
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 with, in 2009, there were around 25 females allocated their time
for
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to
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 reading a book;
this
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 figure increased gradually, crossed the same number with males in 2011, and hit its peak
at the end
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 of the
year
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 with 140
women
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.
On the other hand
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, men started higher than
women
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 for reading, with approximately 50 students.
This
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 trend rapidly increased before reaching its lowest point in 2012, with 80 men.
While
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 male pupils started higher in their first
year
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, it was overtaken by
women
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 in the final
year
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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