Nowadays , distance- learning programs have gained in popularity , but some people argue that online courses can never be taken as good as those taken at college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recently, online
classes
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flavored
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by lots of people,
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, some
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studying online has poor quality than having courses in college or university face-to-face. To a large extent, I
agree
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this
opinion
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three reasons.
Firstly
, the teaching quality of online courses is much lower than
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class
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classes
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in person. Network failure affects the teaching schedule, and teachers cannot 
assure
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whether
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the
audiences
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are
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listening to the
class
whole heartedly
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.
For example
,
poor
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wifi connection of the instructor makes the lesson
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interrupted easily, listeners cannot get the whole sentence of the teacher, and they end up
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a
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poor academic performance in the exam, as they do not understand what the teacher talks about.
Secondly
, students
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from
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the
class
easily if it is
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. As learners can get their electronic gadgets easily without
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concern, most of them play with their
smartphone
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and
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listen to the
class
. From my own experience, I cannot sit still in front of the computer for a
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lecture, as I feel tired easily in the middle of the lesson, though I want to pay attention to what the professor says.
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playing games
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my computer each time, and did not absorb much knowledge of the lecture. 
Although
I agree that lectures taught online
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no geographical limitation is a great advantage for learners, more advantages can be found with offline teaching. Having
class
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classes
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in person with teachers can help educators have more understanding
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students'
ability
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abilities
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. From the reactions of learners, teachers can have more interaction with their target audiences and achieve goals more effectively.
To conclude
, virtual
classes
has
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more disadvantages than real
classes
, which makes me agree that online courses cannot be as good as
classes
in person.
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