The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
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The provided graph and table depict information regarding the average monthly
temperatures
and the average number of
hours
of sunshine per
year
in three major cities including London, New
York
and
Sydney
. In general,
Sydney
has
temperatures
around 25 in January temperature decline in July to around 15 and
temperatures
warm to 25 in December.
In contrast
, London and New
York
have similar trends with
temperatures
around 5-10 in January and
temperatures
increasing around 25-30 in July after that
temperatures
cool around 5-10 again in
december
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. The main trend New
York
has a higher temperature than other cities at 30
this
year
and
Sydney
has a trend contrast other countries. Starting at the
year
Sydney
has high
temperatures
and mid-
year
Sydney
has low
temperatures
other cities and
temperatures
turn to equal early
year
at the end
of the
year
.
Therefore
, Information about the time of sunshine in New
York
is high of time around 2,535
hours
Sydney
has around 2,473
hours
and London
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around 1,180
hours
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