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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
The provided graph and table depict information regarding the average monthly
temperatures
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 and the average number of
hours
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 of sunshine per
year
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 in three major cities including London, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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. In general,
Sydney
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 has
temperatures
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 around 25 in January temperature decline in July to around 15 and
temperatures
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 warm to 25 in December.
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, London and New
York
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 have similar trends with
temperatures
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 around 5-10 in January and
temperatures
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 increasing around 25-30 in July after that
temperatures
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 cool around 5-10 again in
december
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December
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. The main trend New
York
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 has a higher temperature than other cities at 30
this
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year
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 and
Sydney
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 has a trend contrast other countries. Starting at the
year
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Sydney
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 has high
temperatures
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 and mid-
year
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Sydney
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 has low
temperatures
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 other cities and
temperatures
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 turn to equal early
year
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at the end
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 of the
year
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.
Therefore
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, Information about the time of sunshine in New
York
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 is high of time around 2,535
hours
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Sydney
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 has around 2,473
hours
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 and London
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around 1,180
hours
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 87%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, hours, year, york, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 8 times.
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