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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The
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graph
 shows the different modes of transport which
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 used to travel and from work in a European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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,
it is clear that
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 in 1960,
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bus
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the bus
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is
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 the most popular transportation vehicle. In 1980,
people
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like
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train
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 most.
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 in 2000, the number of
people
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 that
using
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 cars is the highest. When the living standard
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 still low, in 1960,
people
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would prefer
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 public transportation because of
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 lower price of
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the ticket
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ticket
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tickets
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. It is certain that
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bus
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buses
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 has taken almost 40
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percent
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per cent
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 of
commuters
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. The tube has attracted
for
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about 27
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percent
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per cent
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.
Then
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 is the
train
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, with nearly 20
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percent
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per cent
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commuters
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of commuters
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. The
least
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last
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 one is by car, about 6%. After 20 years, with great economic growth, the number of
people
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 that choose each
vehicles
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 is nearly the same.
Highest
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 one
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train
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, for about 27
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percent
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per cent
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. About 1
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percent
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per cent
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 lower than
that is
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bus
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the bus
a bus
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.
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 that,
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the car
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car
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cars
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 has got 23% of
commuters
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,
while
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tube
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the tube
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 only
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 21%.
Then
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, in 2000, the number of
people
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 that
choose
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chose
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car
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a car
the car
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 to
travle
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travel
and
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to and
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 from work has extremely
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, with a percentage of 37. Nearly 15% lower than
that is
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tube
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a tube
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, which still has 25% of
commuters
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. Meanwhile,
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train
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trains
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 only got 2
percent
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 more than 20%,
while
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bus
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buses
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 got even lower, 15%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus, people, train, percent, commuters with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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