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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The
gragh
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graph
 shows the different modes of transport which
is
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 used to travel and from work in a European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 in 1960,
bus
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the bus
a bus
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is
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was
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 the most popular transportation vehicle. In 1980,
people
like
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liked
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train
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training
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 most.
Then
 in 2000, the number of
people
 that
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use
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 cars is the highest. When the living standard
is
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was
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 still low, in 1960,
people
would prefer
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preferred
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 public transportation because of
their
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the
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 lower price of
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the ticket
a ticket
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ticket
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tickets
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. It is certain that
bus
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buses
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 has taken almost 40
percent
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per cent
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 of
commuters
. The tube has attracted
for
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apply
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about 27
percent
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per cent
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.
Then
 is the
train
, with nearly 20
percent
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per cent
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commuters
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of commuters
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. The
least
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last
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 one is by car, about 6%. After 20 years, with great economic growth, the number of
people
 that choose each
vehicles
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vehicle
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 is nearly the same.
Highest
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The highest
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 one
is
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is trained
is training
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train
, for about 27
percent
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per cent
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. About 1
percent
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per cent
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 lower than
that is
bus
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the bus
a bus
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.
Besides
 that,
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the car
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car
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cars
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 has got 23% of
commuters
,
while
tube
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the tube
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 only
get
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gets
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 21%.
Then
, in 2000, the number of
people
 that
choose
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chose
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car
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a car
the car
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 to
travle
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travel
and
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to and
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 from work has extremely
increases
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increased
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, with a percentage of 37. Nearly 15% lower than
that is
tube
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a tube
the tube
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, which still has 25% of
commuters
. Meanwhile,
train
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trains
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 only got 2
percent
 more than 20%,
while
bus
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buses
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 got even lower, 15%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus, people, train, percent, commuters with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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