The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emission which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts give
the
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information about how
energy
is used and
gas
emissions
which result from
energy
use
in Australia.
First
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The first
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chart
illustrates household
energy
use
and
second
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the second
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chart
illustrates household greenhouse
gas
emissions
.
Overall
,
gas
emissions
of
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lighting and refrigeration are 2 times more than
energy
use
. Heating
energy
use
is not as much as
waste
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a waste
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of
energy
water heating and waste of
energy
are almost same and, other appliances
gas
emissions
is not as less as
energy
.
According to
the first
chart
, half of
full
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energy
is used for refrigeration and the least
energy
is wasted for cooling . The
energy
use
of cooling , lighting and refrigeration
are
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not as much as others.
According to
the second
chart
,
gas
emissions
of
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from
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water heating and other appliances are more than others and, cooling is
also
the least. The most important
energy
feature for Australian households was heating, followed by water heating, at 42% and 30% respectively.
However
,
emissions
from
this
energy
use
were 15% and 32%, respectively
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, emissions, use, chart with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Household activities
  • Heating
  • Water heating
  • Cooling
  • Appliances
  • Proportion
  • Efficiency
  • Insulation
  • Energy-efficient
  • Sustainable practices
  • Reduce emissions
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon footprint
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