The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
An adult
sugar
cane is ready to harvest in 12 to 18 months.
One
can harvest in
one
by
one
manually using a scythe or, if
one
has the budget, it would be good to use a vehicle to harvest
sugar
canes faster. After that, the harvested
sugar
canes need to be crushed by the crusher to extract its
juice
. Purify the
juice
with a limestone filter so there are no sediments left in the
juice
.
Then
,
one
has to bring the
juice
to an evaporator above a stove.
This
process will evaporate the water content inside the
juice
and change it into a form of syrup. To extract the
sugar
crystals, the syrup will have to be rotated fast to create enough centrifugal force that can separate it from its crystals. The
last
step is to keep the
sugar
crystals in a dry and cool place.
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