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Band 4.5

The spread of a ‘global language’ such as English will threaten national languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In recent years, the
English
language
 has developed in more countries because it gives opportunities and helps
people
's
lives
.
However
, some
people
 think, it may affect other languages in
English
 and I am going to give my opinion in
this
 essay. On the one hand, The
English
language
 only affects all
people
's
lives
 because, Now, Some
people
 are learning the
English
language
 and The
language
 gives more opportunities for
people
's
lives
for example
, My uncle
lives
 now in America and he is preparing to learn the
English
language
 and The
language
 give some outlook and imagination for my uncle and He is teaching
English
 lessons now for some young
people
On the other hand
, some
people
 prefer their own
language
 to
English
 and speak their mother tongue everywhere.
For example
, a close friend of mine who is now a big businessman speaks his mother tongue wherever I go. The person who cooperated always carries an Uzbek translator with him and thinks that if I speak in
English
, I might lose my little
language
 and culture. In conclusion, I think, that
people
 should learn other languages, because those languages increase our worldview and imagination, and we learn about the culture of other countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lingua franca
  • international communication
  • erode
  • linguistic diversity
  • transmitted
  • cultural identity
  • heritage
  • diluted
  • dominant
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language policies
  • real-time translation
  • technological advancements
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