The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below.

The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called 

Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the 

diagrams below.
The given diagram shows the changes, which occurred in a coastal town,
Pentland
, between 1950 and 2007. It can be seen that the
area
developed a lot in the given period of 57 years.In 1950,
Pentland
was located towards the south of the sea. There was a straight main
road
bisecting the town into two. Two
side
roads were there, one to the left and the other to the
right
. The left
road
led to an industrial
area
,
whereas
the
right
one led to the car
park
. The rest of the
area
was mainly grassland. 57 years later, the sea was developed as a Yacht Marina, circled by a newly built
road
, which was linked to the original straight
road
. Many apartments were built to the
right
. The industrial
area
on the left
,
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was replaced by a
park
, a swimming pool and a multi-storey car
park
. The
side
roads were shifted
further
southwards. The car
park
on the
right
was removed and many apartments were built in its place. On the
south east
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corner of
Pentland
, many houses were built and a cinema was constructed in the corner between the main
road
and the left
side
road
. Many shops were opened along the northern
side
of both
side
roads.
Overall
,
Pentland
developed into a busy commercial coastal town over a period of half century.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • coastal area
  • transformation
  • landscape
  • land use
  • infrastructure
  • environmental modifications
  • residential development
  • urban living spaces
  • commercial areas
  • recreational facilities
  • economic landscape
  • green spaces
  • natural habitats
  • urban expansion
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