The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below.

The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called 

Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the 

diagrams below.
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The given diagram shows the changes, which occurred in a coastal town,
Pentland
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, between 1950 and 2007. It can be seen that the
area
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developed a lot in the given period of 57 years.In 1950,
Pentland
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was located towards the south of the sea. There was a straight main
road
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bisecting the town into two. Two
side
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roads were there, one to the left and the other to the
right
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. The left
road
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led to an industrial
area
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,
whereas
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the
right
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one led to the car
park
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. The rest of the
area
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was mainly grassland. 57 years later, the sea was developed as a Yacht Marina, circled by a newly built
road
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, which was linked to the original straight
road
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. Many apartments were built to the
right
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. The industrial
area
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on the left
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was replaced by a
park
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, a swimming pool and a multi-storey car
park
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. The
side
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roads were shifted
further
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southwards. The car
park
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on the
right
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was removed and many apartments were built in its place. On the
south east
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corner of
Pentland
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, many houses were built and a cinema was constructed in the corner between the main
road
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and the left
side
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road
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. Many shops were opened along the northern
side
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of both
side
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roads.
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,
Pentland
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developed into a busy commercial coastal town over a period of half century.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pentland, area, road, side, right, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • coastal area
  • transformation
  • landscape
  • land use
  • infrastructure
  • environmental modifications
  • residential development
  • urban living spaces
  • commercial areas
  • recreational facilities
  • economic landscape
  • green spaces
  • natural habitats
  • urban expansion
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