Overpopulation is a big problem today in many major urban centers. What are the causes, and possible solutions?
Currently, some metropolitan cities face a main problem namely overpopulation in their
areas
. This
essay will discuss about
the factors which contribute Remove the preposition
apply
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to and
and
effective solution to tackle Correct your spelling
an
this
case.
There are many reasons why overpopulation occurs in major urban centers
. One important is resident migration from the village to the Change the spelling
centres
city
because they desire to increase financial income by having occupation in the cities. As a result
, there is rapid
density Correct article usage
a rapid
population
in the city
in huge number
. Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
Futhermore
, unbalanced folk growth Correct your spelling
Furthermore
also
contributes in
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to
explosion
of Add an article
an explosion
the explosion
population
. It was caused by these population
can not be Fix the agreement mistake
populations
unacompanied
with repairing and updating infrastructures. Correct your spelling
accompanied
unaccompanied
Thus
, local council
experience that unable to adjust Fix the agreement mistake
councils
with
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to
population
growth quickly in term
of sanitation and accessing clean water.
In order to tackle Fix the agreement mistake
terms
this
problem, we have a lot of efficient methods. First,
conducting development
of planned urban Correct article usage
the development
areas
. Government
can ensure building the Correct article usage
The government
city
by considering policies about public services for people, for example
, government
have to pay attention Add an article
the government
about
policies in public Change preposition
to
transportations
and Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
infrastructures
. Because they have to ensure that all of Fix the agreement mistake
infrastructure
people
in the Add an article
the people
city
can be used by folks. Secondly
, empowerment
rural Replace the word
empowering
areas
to deal with over
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overpopulation
population
. This efforts
can Change the determiner
This effort
These efforts
be begin
by encouraging economic development and infrastructure will reduce pressure and Change the verb form
be begun
providing
investment for agriculture, local industries and basic services. Wrong verb form
provide
For instance
, conducting training for villagers about crucial softskill
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soft skill
soft skills
such
as crafting and sewing.
To conclude
, the main factors behind the overpopulation that happen
in Correct subject-verb agreement
happens
main
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the main
city
are resident migration and unbalanced population
growth. However
, possible solutions are holding development
of planned urban Add an article
the development
areas
and empowerment rural
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of rural
areas
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Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors. For instance, 'folk growth' should be 'population growth', and 'unacompanied' should be 'unaccompanied'. These mistakes can detract from the clarity of your arguments.
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