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The chart graph shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different types of attractions from 1980 to 2010

The given line graph illustrates the percentage of four types of tourist sites which were visited by travellers in
scotland
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Scotland
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 from 1980 to 2010 a
period
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 of 30 years.
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, it can be seen that castle and zoo visiting increased
while
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 festival and aquarium percentage decreased over the
period
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. Another notable point is that
castle
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the castle
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 was the most popular place among others
in
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for
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the
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apply
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most of the
period
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. In 1980 visitors
of
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to
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castle
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the castle
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 were about 24%
then
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 rose to 45% in1995 and fell considerably to 35% and almost remained steady to the end of the
period
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. zoo
strated
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started
 with only 10%,
although
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 there were
flatuations
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fluctuations
 until 2000
this
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 trend
exprienced
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experienced
 a remarkable rise to around 20% in 2010.
On the other hand
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,
aquarium
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aquariums
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 and
festival
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festivals
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strated
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started
 with 20% and 23% .
the Aquarium
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The aquarium
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 went through a sharp increase to 35% in 5 years
then
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 recovered its previous level by 1990 and
droped
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dropped
 to less than 10% in 2010. The latter rose to approximately 45% in 1995 and bounced back to 35% in 2000 and almost
leveled
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levelled
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 out for the rest of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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