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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world's fuel resouces. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statatment?

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is the prices of
fuels
 have increased.Now people are
beggining
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beginning
 to realize that
exist
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 many reasons
increased
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the
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 prices of
fuels
.Personally, I tend to think that the world's
fuel
resources
 decrease year after year.
Firstly
,it is well known that many companies
try
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 to change our
use
fuels
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of fuels
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are
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 the only way to reduce world
consuption
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consumption
 of
fuel
.What
i
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 mean here is that
inevitable
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inevitably
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 we beginning to
use
ecology
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 energy.One of the main reasons behind
that is
dynamic
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the dynamic
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 ongoing widespread ecology
resources
.A good case in point is
sun light
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sunlight
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 or waves,other ecology electro statio.
On the other hand
,it can
also
 be argued that our Ears have limited
fuel
resources
.
That is
 to say that our trend
have
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 lots of consequences.We can not recover these
type
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types
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 of
resources
such
 as
fuel
,because our planet
create
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creates
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their
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apply
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in
depend
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depend on
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 some centuries,
people
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and people
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use
 gifts of nature without borders.If evaluate
this
 situation,so we need
border
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enourmous consuption
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enormous consumption
 of
fuels
.Take
for example
less
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fewer
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use
 transports or make limited for drivers,
also
i
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I
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 can offer more
use
 public transports. In
conclusion
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 taking everything mentioned into account in our final
analysis
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analysis,
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 we can say that modern people do not care about nature,so we have problems like
prices
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the prices
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 of
fuels
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fuel
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.
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task achievement
The essay provides a stance and some arguments, although it could be improved by presenting viewpoints more clearly and developing ideas further to enhance task response.
coherence & cohesion
Ensure that your introduction and conclusion are clear and more direct, as they help set the context and summarize your stance effectively.
coherence & cohesion
For better coherence, make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea, and use connecting words to transition between sentences and paragraphs smoothly.
task achievement
Incorporate specific examples and evidence to support your arguments; this strengthens your essay and makes your points more convincing.
task achievement
References to the potential for ecological energy solutions, such as sunlight or wave power, shows an attempt to provide alternatives and relevant examples.
coherence & cohesion
The essay structure, with a beginning introducing the topic, body paragraphs presenting arguments, and a conclusion, is present and contributes to the overall cohesiveness.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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