The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
The graph depicts amount of the junk food
consumption
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consumed
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by the youth
during
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for
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25 years.
It is clear that
both Fish and Chips and Hamburgers had an
up ward
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upward
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trend
while
pizza
showed a
down ward
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downward
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trend. In 1975, Fish and chips consumers stood at the highest position of using with 100
number of
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times
eaten per year. In the second stage was
Hamburger
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Hamburgers
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by 10
times
of consumption yearly and
Pizza
stood at least
of
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popularity
with
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at
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under 5
times
. During the first decade,
Pizza
and Hamburgers experienced a tremendous increase to 35 and 85
times
respectively. From 1985 to 1995,
Pizza
followed a doubling
in
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80
times
also
Hamburgers popularity showed a moderate climb
by
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15
times
. From 1995 onward, both
group
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groups
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maintained at the same level. From 1985 to 2000, the rate of Fish and Chips eaters had a remarkable drop from 97 to 38
times
however
it showed a noticeable growth of 97 number between 1980 and 1985.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, times with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Trend
  • Hamburgers
  • Pizza
  • Fried chicken
  • Period
  • Health awareness
  • Availability
  • Taste preferences
  • Marketing influence
  • Implications
  • Western culture
  • Peak periods
  • Promotions
  • Societal habits
  • Patterns
  • Popular
  • Declined
  • Introduction
  • Eating habits
  • Summarise
  • Prediction
  • Recommendations
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