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Some people feel that developments in science are happening so fast that it is difficult for people to appreciate the effects of such advances. Others feel we should trust scientists more and stop worrying. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The general public is not able to keep up with changes in the world of science and so some
people
 have begun to mistrust
scientists
. Other
people
 think,
however
, that the public should have more faith in
scientists
. Some
people
 argue that the
developments
 in the world of science are not clear to the general public.
This
 is because there are too many happening at once and because they are too complicated for
people
 to understand.
For example
, advances and research related to genetics or other areas of health are not fully understood, so
people
 either ignore them or worry about them. And so,
scientists
 face strong opposition to any
developments
. To other
people
,
scientists
 have brought enormous benefits to society because they have helped many
people
.
Besides
 improving public health,
scientists
 are involved in other areas which make our lives easier,
such
 as transport and engineering. Cities in countries
such
 as Japan and France are now better connected with high-speed trains with all the latest facilities like TVs and Internet connections. So,
people
 should be grateful for what
scientists
 do. In my opinion,
while
 it is important to allow
scientists
 to continue making advances, we should monitor any
developments
, especially in the field of medicine and technology
such
 as artificial intelligence, more carefully. In
this
 way, we can make sure that we do not end up with monsters which are a combination of humans and machines, as in some science-fiction or horror films. In conclusion, if the public were more informed about any scientific
developments
, they might accept them more.
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Detail Expansion
To improve task achievement, try to expand on your examples with more detail. For instance, when discussing the benefits of scientific advancements, providing specific studies or statistics could bolster your argument.
Viewpoint Balance
In discussing both views, ensure balanced coverage and development of each perspective to strengthen your argumentation.
Sentence Structure
Consider incorporating more varied sentence structures to enhance the readability and complexity of your writing.
Structure
Your essay effectively introduces and concludes the topic, creating a strong framework for discussion.
Logic
You have provided a logical structure that guides the reader clearly through the discussion.
Topic Understanding
Your ability to discuss advancements in science and their societal implications demonstrates a good grasp on the topic.

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