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Some people think our first impression of someone is important, while others think we should not judge another person so quickly and should take our time to know them better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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People
are
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judging
someone
's behaviour at
first
 sight is
hot
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a hot
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 topic nowadays. Some pupils believe that
first
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the first
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impression
 is the
last
impression
 but others reckon that we should take
time
 to describe
someone
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someone's
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 traits until we better
known
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know
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to
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apply
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them.
This
 essay will discuss both
view
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views
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 and
according to
 my
perspective
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perspective,
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 we need some
time
 to judge
someone
. To commence with the
first
 view,
first
 and foremost
thing is
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,
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people
believes
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believe
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 that
first
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the first
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impression
 is the
last
impression
 because your
first
 appearance will
attracts
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attract
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the
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apply
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people
 towards you.
For example
, if you go for
interview
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an interview
the interview
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 and wear
the
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apply
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formal clothing as
compare
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compared
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 to
non formal
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non-formal
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 cloth you will
looks
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look
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 well educated with all know of ethics and
well
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a well
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 raised person and it will put
the
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a
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 great
impression
 on your interviewer.
Therefore
,
first
impression
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impressions
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is
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are
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 necessary
for attracts
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to attract
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the
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apply
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people
. Moving forward to
others
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others'
other's
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opinion
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opinions
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,
people
 need to take some
time
 to
thier
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their
 personalities. We cannot judge a book by its cover until or unless we read it. Some
people
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people's
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 personalities
is
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are
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 not look good because they don't want to show off
thier
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their
the
 power of money.
For example
,
an
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at an
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 airport there is
guy
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a guy
the guy
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 who weared a former cloth and
trying
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tried
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 to save
a
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the
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 life of
child
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a child
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 who got cardic
arrest
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arrested
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 but
people
 at
airport
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the airport
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refuse
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refused
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 him to treat
child
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the child
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 because he
did
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was
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 not dressed like a doctor but after his
successful
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successfully
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 saved
life
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the life
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of
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apply
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child tells the
people
 that he is famous Indian doctor Anand.
Hence
,
people
needs
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need
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 to take
time
 to judge
someone
 before making any
descion
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decision
 towards them.
To conclude
, I believe that
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a
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first
impression
 is necessary to
shows
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show
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about
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apply
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your personality but taking
a
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apply
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time
 and judging
someone
 is better because it tells about
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a persons
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persons
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person's
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 nature and occupation.
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Develop your main points fully by expanding on your ideas and examples. Make sure to explain how your examples support your arguments more explicitly.
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Revisit grammar and spelling to reduce inaccuracies, as they can detract from the clarity of your arguments. Practice using complex sentences accurately to convey your ideas more effectively.
Task Response
You effectively discussed both sides of the argument, providing a balanced view before stating your own opinion.
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You included relevant examples to support your arguments, a key aspect of achieving a higher score.
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