The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
The diagram compares the floor scheme of the central
library
from now to 20 years ago.
Overall
,
although
there have been significant changes in various rooms and the central area of the
library
, there are similarities between the two designs. Looking at the older plan;When entering the
library
, there was an enquiry desk to the
right
and a reading
room
to the left. Two tables and a number of chairs were situated at the centre of the
library
and to the
right
of them were the
adult
non-fiction
books
and to the left, were the
adult
fiction ones. The
room
for children’s
books
was located at the top
right
corner and if anyone wanted to access the computer games, they had to go to the top left
room
. Shifting the attention to the new plan, it is noticeable that there
has
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been major changes including the removal of the tables and chairs alongside
adult
non-fiction
books
. Amenities for catering have been included
such
as self-service machines and a cafe
in
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the
right
. A computer
room
is located at the lower left corner and the reference
books
have replaced
adult
fiction. There
are
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now
rooms
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room
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for newer activities
such
as storytelling and lecturing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, right, room, adult, books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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