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Older generations often hold some traditional ideas on the correct way of life, thought and behaviour. Most people argue that these are not helpful for younger generations to prepare for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disaaree?

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The concepts of tradition are considered a key factor in providing guidance and solutions to younger
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 others consider it helpless.I partially disagree with the former idea, pieces of advice based on tradition may be the optimum solution for current challenges. Many traditional concepts do not support the equality of genders.By limiting women's and men's opportunities in the society.
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,traditional
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 include a belief that women should focus on household responsibilities
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 it was only men's duty to earn and provide all necessities for the family.
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, younger
generations
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 may feel restricted and misunderstood by traditional views of gender inequality, especially when they grow up in an environment that values and promotes gender equality.
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,it will create a sense of disconnection between old and young
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,the traditional
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 provide sagacious advice that can be applied in modern life,especially for juniors.Since most of them do not have basic
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 when they face difficulties.
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,most of the traditional concepts support and teach how to live in discipline which is so significant to apply In today's life.
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, juniors struggle to organize their messy life
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 a lack of methods and widely prevalent among young
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,it is crucial to manage time effectively,setting goals which help younger people navigate chaotic schedules by following the old traditional
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. In conclusion,
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 most traditional methods help us to handle current-day problems,In my view,they do not have in common with the present and can not be taken into account when making decisions
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 their outdated structure.
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task achievement
Try to expand on your arguments to provide a more comprehensive discussion. This would strengthen your analysis and clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that ideas flow smoothly from one to another. Using linking words and phrases can help with this.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are clear and present, addressing the essay prompt directly.
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You provide relevant examples, such as those about gender roles, which support the argument effectively.
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