You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • say why he/she would not enjoy going to college • explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her • suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
Dear Sandy,
I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am writing to let you know that I think you should take a professional opportunity right away instead
of going to college.
The reason why you would not like attending college is because it is often expensive. In addition
, I think this
type of study is too theoretical so, it can be challenging to develop your practical skills throughout the course.
Being employed by someone would be the best option for you because you can learn on the go and it will be faster to improve your artistic skills. Moreover
, you can earn some income while
studying.
I would recommend you search for illustrator positions, such
as in a botanical magazine, for example
, since I know you love drawing themes related to Flora. Furthermore
, looking for comic artist openings would also
suit you as I know you also
enjoy this
subject.
I hope this
information can be useful to you and I look forward to receiving your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Amanda LagoSubmitted by amandacflago23 on
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logical structure
To further enhance the logical structure, consider detailing additional benefits of gaining work experience early in your career path.
complete response
In terms of task achievement, providing a bit more depth about how specific job roles align with your friend's interests and skills could strengthen the response.
logical structure
The letter effectively uses paragraphs to separate ideas, making it easy to follow.
suitable writing tone
You've done well to use a friendly and supportive tone appropriate to the letter's purpose and audience.
greeting and closing
Your conclusion neatly wraps up the letter, leaving the recipient with a clear understanding of your stance and suggestions.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite