It is often considered that changes are more beneficial to people than traying to avoid it and have everything remain the same. Do you think the advantages of changes overweight the disadvantages?

There is a thinking among individuals that certain changes in the living pattern of
people
have many positive effects rather than ignoring it or remaining plateaued
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. These differences in
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world can have either good impacts or some negative impacts on society.
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advantages
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and disadvantages of these diversions and
also
discuss my opinion. On
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hand, changes in
life styles
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lifestyles
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of
population
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the population
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are very essential for
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the progress
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of any nation. As technology and automation
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developing at a very high rate, it is necessary for
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citizens to follow
it
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them
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in their own
life
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lives
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.
Consequently
, individuals can live in a more comfortable and
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state.
However
, if a person can't
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adapt
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with
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to
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changed
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a changed
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society, he/she will be neglected by the world
to accept
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too
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.
For instance
,
people
living in the forests are referred
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backward society and rejected by
rest
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the rest
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of the world.
On the other hand
, there are
also
certain bad outcomes of these changes
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the
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human
life
. Nowadays, with
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the adoption
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of new lifestyles,
people
are getting
dettached
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detached
from their own nation's culture.
For example
,
Indian
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the Indian
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modern generation is more influenced by
western
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clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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and branded products,
such
that they
are
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do
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not
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to
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their roots and cultural activities.
To conclude
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i
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can say that with ongoing modernization, it is important for youth to adopt it so that
people
can stay in a
well maintained
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and more
comfort
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state. But, if these conversions are the reasons for citizens to divert in
wrong
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direction,
then
remaining in
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the same
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living pattern is
preferrable
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preferable
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. I think that following new things without forgetting our ingrained culture is the best way to live a peaceful
life
.
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