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You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work, but it is very expensive. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • describe the content of this course and its benefits • why you would like to attend this course suggest how him/her could help you

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Dear Sir , I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I watched a training video on a leadership
course
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 for
restaurant
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managers
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 .
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, the
course
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 is expensive but it is a very useful tool to learn if you could help me financially with
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 opportunity. Leadership courses are designed for food
restaurant
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managers
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 in which all
managers
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 learn how to run a
restaurant
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 with specific targets and attainable goals .
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 ,
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also
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 get food safety certificates
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 of the program. I would like to attend
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course
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 because our
restaurant
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managers
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 lack of leadership skills to make our business profitable .So, I would like to learn these skills in order to educate other
managers
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 . You are a supervisor of our
restaurant
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 and as a part of the management team , I think
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course
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 benefit you in many ways as mentioned above . The
course
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 fee is around $1000
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if you could help me through a scholarship program to enrol in
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course
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 that would be really appreciable and we can achieve our goals too. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Roopkamal Kaur.

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Tone & Introduction
Ensure the opening of your letter sets the context more clearly. A brief introduction about your role and a more formal tone could enhance clarity and impression.
Details & Examples
Consider using specific examples or explaining in more detail how the skills acquired from the course will directly impact your current role or the restaurant's performance.
Structure
Using paragraph headings or bullet points could help in structuring the letter more effectively, especially when listing the course benefits or how it applies to your work.
Content Relevance
You did well in identifying and explaining the need for the course, making a clear connection between the course's benefits and the restaurant's needs.
Closing
Your closing paragraph succinctly reiterates your request and expresses hope for a positive outcome, which is a good practice in formal requests.
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