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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the pie charts provides the proportion of money that a children's charity in America spent and received in 2016.
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, the vast majority of
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the donation
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donation
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donations
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was
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 food and that of costs was program services, whilst the least proportion of
donation
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donations
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 was government grants, and that of expenditure was management and general use.
According to
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 the information shown in the pie charts, 86,6% of
revenue
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the revenue
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 sources of the
children
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children's
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 charity in the US
was
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 donated food,
while
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 the governmental grants
was
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 only 0,2% which was
same
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the same
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 as the investment income.
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, community contributions were 10.4% which
were
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 8.2% than the percentage of
programe
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programme
 revenues by 2.2%.
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, the children's charity spent 95.8% of their
fundings
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funding
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 on program services which was almost 60 times more than that of management and general use by 1.6%. What should be particularly mentioned is that the expense
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of
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fandrasing
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fundraising
 was 1% more than that of management and general costs by 2,6%.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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