The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featuers,and make comparisions where relevant

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featuers,and make comparisions where relevant
The graph shows ,
number
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a number
the number
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of steps involved in making process of fast food like
noodles
.
although
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Although
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it is very easy to cook the
noodles
, there are so many
procedure
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procedures
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to get the
noodles
from its basic material.In the following
passages
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passages,
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I'm going to
atlk
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talk
about how the
noodles
are being made.
Overall
,there are
total
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a total
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of eight steps in
making
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the making
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process.These stages include some major
process
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processes
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like storing the
flour
, cooking
of
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apply
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noodles
and labelling the final product.Rollers are used to blend the water and oil with
flour
.
Then
, the mixture is passed to
container
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a container
the container
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which converts the mixture into dough strips.
In addition
to that ,
vegetables
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vegetable
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spices
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and spices
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are inject
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are injected
are injecting
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to
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into
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mixture
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the mixture
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. Among eight steps,
teh
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the
first step is getting
flour
from outside and
store
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storing
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that in silos.Following that ,the stored
flour
is passed through
mixer
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the mixer
a mixer
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to add some water and oil substance.
Thirdly
,rollers transform the blended substance into dough sheets.
Then
,in
next
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the next
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stage
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stage,
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the dough sheets
are convert
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are converted
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into strips.
As a result
,sheets are able to get the noodle shape.
In addition
,the next step involves
in
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transforming strips into discs.Once,they get full disc noodle shape,
cooking
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the cooking
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step helps the discs to get dry by frying them in oil.
Consequantly
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Consequently
,the discs
are fill
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are filled
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into cups.These cups have already
with
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apply
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some vegetable spice.
Lastly
,the cups are
get
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apply
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sealed in
sealing
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the sealing
a sealing
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stage.Once the sealing is done,the final
noodles
products are ready.
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