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The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate information about the graduate and postgraduate
students
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 who did not go into full-time
work
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 after leaving college in the UK in 2008.
Overall
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, what stands out from the grapes is that between graduate and postgraduate
students
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 there was a very large difference of approximately 10 times which
further
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 was the highest in the 2 types of
students
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.
While
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 the voluntary was the lowest
overall
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.
According to
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 the graduate
students
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, the
further
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 study was around 29,665 which was the peak of the type of
work
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.
While
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 Part-time
work
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 was as nearly as unemployment, Part-time
work
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 had just over 17,000
people
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 and unemployment had just under 17,000
people
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.
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, voluntary
work
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 had approximately 3,500
people
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.
In addition
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, the number of postgraduate pupils,
further
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 study was at the top of
this
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 type and it had 2,725
people
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while
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 close to part-time
work
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 had just under 2,700
people
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.
Moreover
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, unemployment there was well over 1,600 pupils and voluntary
work
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 had 345 pupils which was the lowest of all types.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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