In many cities an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and there is a lack of sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?

It has become increasingly common these days for people living in the same
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to not know one another.
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cost of living is a major contributory factor. These days, commodities are expensive, and for people to be able to afford
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comfortable lives. These days both men and women t
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Task Achievement
Expand the essay to further explore the causes and solutions for the lack of community. A good essay fully develops its ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure the essay is well-organized with a clear introduction, fully developed ideas in the body paragraphs, and a conclusion summarizing the main points.
Task Achievement & Coherence and Cohesion
Include specific examples and detailed explanations to illustrate your points. This strengthens the argument and makes your essay more persuasive.
Coherence & Cohesion
Good job addressing the topic directly in the introduction and establishing a clear structure for the essay.
Task Achievement
You've shown the ability to identify underlying causes, indicating good analytical skills.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Population movement
  • Diverse communities
  • Busy lifestyles
  • Long working hours
  • Digital communities
  • Personal security concerns
  • Architectural designs
  • City planning
  • Natural meet and interact
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