Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel,To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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A group of individuals thinks that to ameliorate the global ecosystem health, there is a need to increase
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fuel
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prices.
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my perspective, it is a great way to improve the condition of
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environment and decrease the prevailing hazardous problems related to
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with, the reason to snowball the rate of fossil
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is that it will discourage others
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from using
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vehicles
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that consume more gasoline.
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, they will find the
electric powered
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vehicles
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more
economic
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. On the whole, the release of exhaust gases into the
air
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will cause
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serious
air
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pollution problems to decrease.
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, when people take their
vehicles
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less on roads especially if some restrictions are imposed
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it alleviates the
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air
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quality which is practised in many countries
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as in India when
fuel
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price
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changes
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due to
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lesser availability of fossilized
energy
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in the global market,
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people begin to find more economic ways to convey themselves to work and even public transportation becomes inevitable for the public use.
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,
air
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degradation begins to decrease.
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, if
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fuel
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a fuel
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rate hike occurs
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an impetus to develop more renewable sources of
energy
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drives communities to replace it.
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, scientists and companies will find other
replacable
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replaceable
fuel
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namely
biofuel
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the biofuel
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market as more lucrative to research and develop technologies for that.
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, the issues in
global
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supply of crude oil
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driving companies to research
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biofuels that will help replace
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fossil fuels.
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,
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fossil
energy
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could be replaced if the
fuel
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prices will increase. By replacing it with biofuels or electric
vehicles
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, it will help alleviate many
environment
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environmental
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issues like
air
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pollution and research for more
environment friendly
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environment-friendly
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technologies will be more viable.
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, the future of sustainable
energy
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will be brighter and will help save the earth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic inequality
  • renewable energy
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • demand elasticity
  • innovation
  • fossil fuels
  • carbon footprint
  • green technology
  • supply and demand
  • alternative energy
  • economic growth
  • industrialization
  • transportation logistics
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