Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problem can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?
At
the
present, almost all Correct article usage
apply
people
have some problems
but nowadays, they have difficulties sleep
and Wrong verb form
sleeping
also
they are
not enough sleep. Verb problem
do
This
essay is about sleep problems
and solution
to Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
this
problem. As the child, some young people
spend a lot of time to
Change preposition
on
phone
and electronic Fix the agreement mistake
phones
game
Fix the agreement mistake
games
this
situation bring
Verb problem
apply
disturb
Correct subject-verb agreement
disturbs
people
's sleep. If people
doesn't
spend to network their time, they will notCorrect subject-verb agreement
don't
a
chronic disease Add a missing verb
have a
to
Change preposition
of
sleeping-sicknees
. Correct your spelling
sleeping
Besides
that,sleeping-sicknees
Correct your spelling
sleeping sicknesses
has
many different Correct subject-verb agreement
have
kind
of Change to a plural noun
kinds
problems
and solutions.
Nowadays, technology is developing year
by year
so people
spend many
time Correct word choice
apply
to
Change preposition
on to
phone
Wrong verb form
phones
this
situation is very bad them
especially Change preposition
for them
for
their eyes will be Change preposition
because
illness
Replace the word
ill
additionally
they have a
chronic disease Correct article usage
apply
sleepless
. Replace the word
and sleeplessness
Moreover
, doctor
says "Many Add an article
the doctor
people
has
sleepless Change the verb form
have
ill
and Replace the word
illness
this
ill
increasing Replace the word
illness
year
by year
" As well as
, local Rephrase
Also
people
is believe
that to different soporific and they take Change the verb form
believe
a
medicine Remove the article
apply
this
sleeping draught. This
position bring
some Change the verb form
brings
problems
with dependent our sleep. For example
, if one people
take Add an article
the drug
a drug
drug
, he will be Fix the agreement mistake
drugs
sickness
and he will not take Replace the word
sick
a
medicine, he will not sleep so Remove the article
apply
this
drug is dangerous for our life.
Many people
has
sleeping draught Change the verb form
have
to
Change preposition
in
this
state have some problem
and we find Fix the agreement mistake
problems
solution
. Add an article
a solution
the solution
Firstly
, sleeping ill has not phone sometime
Fix the agreement mistake
sometimes
due to
electronic light's
Change noun form
light
effecting
Correct your spelling
affecting
is
bad eyes as the result Unnecessary verb
apply
people
will not good sleep at the
night Correct article usage
apply
in
that case, Add the comma(s)
, in
difdiffire
soporific need not to Correct your spelling
different
people
. They should be occupied with sport
and different outdoor Fix the agreement mistake
sports
activetes
after Correct your spelling
activities
activates
people
can sleep at the
tonight. As revealed by, at the TV Correct article usage
apply
should
be some shows about our sleep Correct pronoun usage
there should
then
people
acts to doctors advice.
In conclusion, at the
present many Correct article usage
apply
people
has
sleeping Correct subject-verb agreement
have
problems
however
we find solution
to their Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
problems
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