Some people think Traditional books are better than e-books To what extent Do you agree or disagree?
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people
think traditional books
or e-
books
better
but some young humans Add a missing verb
are better
use
both of
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books
and also
I use
electronic books
every day. Sometimes, I use
paper books
.
Nowadays, some young humans use
traditional book
because these Fix the agreement mistake
books
books
extremely
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are extremely
benefit
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beneficial
for
children and Change preposition
to
also
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the young
use
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book
. But many parents think young only should Fix the agreement mistake
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use
paper book
. Fix the agreement mistake
books
Moreover
, older people
think might be hazardous e-
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e-books
book
and also
I use
both of
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books
. For instance
, my classmates make use
of traditional book
because they are believe very superb these Fix the agreement mistake
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books
.
From one perspective, electronic books
have gained substantial popularity in my country over the past few years with the advent of e-readers, tablets and smartphones, many people
have transitioned to digital reading and also
all people
can find the time they want from e-
books
. Electronic books
can be more portable and convenient features. For example
, I use
e-
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e-books
book
at the
school and Correct article usage
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course
every day but these Fix the agreement mistake
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books
for
small kids. If young Add a missing verb
are for
people
use
e-
books
, they may lose their eyesight in the near future. But I use
electronic books
every day because I am studying should now.
In conclusion, many people
think e-
books
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are extremely
for
children but In my opinion, Change preposition
to
electronic
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as electronic
books
continue to grow it's more probable that the two formats will coexist catering to different preferences and needs also
electronic books
might ever completely replace printed books
in the future.Submitted by soglomovsarvar on
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Introduction
Work on providing a clearer thesis statement in your introduction to directly address the essay prompt.
Structure
Try to organize your essay with clear paragraphs, each representing a single main idea, to improve coherence.
Example
Use more specific examples to support your arguments. This helps in making your points clearer and more persuasive.
Tone
Maintain a more formal and academic tone throughout the essay to meet the expectations of the IELTS writing task.
Grammar
Be cautious of grammar and punctuation errors as they can hinder the clarity of your arguments.
Balance
You effectively covered both sides of the argument by discussing the benefits and drawbacks of electronic and traditional books.
Conclusion
Your conclusion succinctly summarizes your viewpoint, maintaining a clear stance on the topic.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite