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In the future robots may do more of the work that is done by humans today. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages ?

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Due to
 the rapid growth of technology , the world has come a long way
therefore
 the lifestyle of people has changed a lot in the
last
 few years. In the midst of change , People invented modern things every day to make people's
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 easier and more comfortable. Robots become an important part of our lives it helps us in many ways . A colossal number of folks believe that in the near future robots will do the work which used to be done by humans. There is a range of conflicting arguments related to its pros and cons . In the succeeding monograph , I intend to delve into the rationale for both beliefs
as well as
 proffer examples to justify my notion
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Task Achievement
Provide a clear thesis statement that states your view regarding the advantages and disadvantages of robots doing more work.
Task Achievement
Include specific examples or scenarios to illustrate your points about the advantages and disadvantages.
Coherence & Cohesion
Structure your essay with distinct paragraphs for the introduction, each of your main points, and your conclusion to enhance readability.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a range of linking words to show the relationship between ideas and maintain the flow of your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
In the conclusion, succinctly summarize your main points and restate your opinion to reinforce your argument.
Task Achievement
You have successfully introduced the topic of how robots may do more work in the future and provided a general overview of the debate regarding its advantages and disadvantages.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your writing exhibits a positive command of language and an ability to engage with the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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