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The diagram details the process of making wool. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram details the process of making wool. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram illustrates the step-by-step
process
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 of manufacturing
of
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wool
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.
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, more than twelve steps are involved in the
process
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 of producing
wool
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, in which some of the end product is used for various purposes.
Initially
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, the sheep's
fur
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 is sheared and cleaned with the help of certain tools and dried
in
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the
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outdoors. After drying, the
fur
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 is
then
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 moved on to the next
process
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 of spinning.
Industry made
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 machine spins the
fur
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 and
turns
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turn
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 the
fur
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 into
wool
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 and string, after the spinning
process
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, the string is
then
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 taken to
recycling
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the recycling
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 stage.
On the other hand
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, the
wool
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 is made into tufts of
wool
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 and
then
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 stored separately in the
tuft
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tufted
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 storage in huge quantities of numerous shades. The tufts of
wool
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 with different shades
is
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are
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 carried out into balls of yarn
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, as an end product, they are used for knitting clothes. tools carpets for houses and jackets to use in winter.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, wool, fur with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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