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In many countries around the wortel, nural people. are moving to cities, so the population inthe Countryside is deereaing. Do you think it is a positive negative development

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In the modern era, numerous
village
 residents are relocating
themselves
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in
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to
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 urban sides and
this
phenomena
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 is occurring all over the globe.
As a result
,
population
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the population
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 rate in rural areas is now reducing. Considering
this
aspeed
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speed
, there are both positive as well of negative development and both views are
further
 elaborated in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, discussing the bright sides of the given view, countryside individuals will be able to access
to
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numerous facilities which
is
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 not available in their area . In
the
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this
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 way, they can live life easily by utilizing modern technology and gadgets .
Further
 , a
nations
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nation's
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 development rate and speed
is
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completely depend on
people
 living in metro
cities
. The higher the number of
people
, evolution will occur swiftly. Apart from these, globalization
also
 helps folks in getting jobs.
For instance
, there are very less jobs in
village
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villages
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 compared to towns.
Hence
,
people
 migrate for employment.
Lastly
, children will be able to get
better
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a better
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 quality of education by moving to
a modern areas
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modern areas
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.
However
,
these viewpoint
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this viewpoint
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also
 have many dark sides.
To begin
 with, the rate of population in
cities
 will
Increases
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 which can cause many major problems .There will be very less work opportunities compared to a
larg
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large
 number of
people
.
Furthermore
 ,large
cities
is
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are
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 responsible for many criminal activities
such
 as
nobbery
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robbery
snobbery
, murder and many more. There would be constant traffic jams in urban areas .
Due to
rise
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 in
number
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a number
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 of
people
, air, water, soil and noise pollution
well
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will
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whe
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the
 increase.
Moreover
, the countryside will
also
 face problems
such
 as if there are fewer or no
people
 living in the
village
 that area can become unhabited if left for a long time.
To sum up
, there are so many merits of living in
cites
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cities
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such
 as access to better facilities and so on, but
on the other
hand
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 the migration of
village
 residents to
cities
 causes
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numbers
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number
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 of problems
such
 as
increase
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an increase
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 in criminal activities, constant traffic jams and many more .
Therefore
,
this
 aspect has both positive
as well as
 negative developments.
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