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In the modern era, numerous
village
residents are relocating themselves
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apply
in
urban sides and Change preposition
to
this
phenomena
is occurring all over the globe. Change the determiner
phenomenon
As a result
,population
rate in rural areas is now reducing. Considering Correct article usage
the population
this
aspeed
, there are both positive as well of negative development and both views are Correct your spelling
speed
further
elaborated in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, discussing the bright sides of the given view, countryside individuals will be able to access to
numerous facilities which Change preposition
apply
is
not available in their area . In Change the verb form
are
the
way, they can live life easily by utilizing modern technology and gadgets .Correct determiner usage
this
Further
, a nations
development rate and speed Change noun form
nation's
is
completely depend on Unnecessary verb
apply
people
living in metro cities
. The higher the number of people
, evolution will occur swiftly. Apart from these, globalization also
helps folks in getting jobs. For instance
, there are very less jobs in village
compared to towns. Fix the agreement mistake
villages
Hence
, people
migrate for employment. Lastly
, children will be able to get better
quality of education by moving to Correct article usage
a better
a modern areas
.
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modern areas
a modern area
However
, these viewpoint
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this viewpoint
these viewpoints
also
have many dark sides. To begin
with, the rate of population in cities
will Increases
which can cause many major problems .There will be very less work opportunities compared to a Wrong verb form
Increase
larg
number of Correct your spelling
large
people
. Furthermore
,large cities
is
responsible for many criminal activities Change the verb form
are
such
as nobbery
, murder and many more. There would be constant traffic jams in urban areas . Correct your spelling
robbery
snobbery
Due to
rise
in Correct article usage
the rise
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
people
, air, water, soil and noise pollution well
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will
whe
increase. Correct your spelling
the
Moreover
, the countryside will also
face problems such
as if there are fewer or no people
living in the village
that area can become unhabited if left for a long time.
To sum up
, there are so many merits of living in cites
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cities
such
as access to better facilities and so on, but on the other
hand
the migration of Add a comma
hand,
village
residents to cities
causes Correct article usage
a numbers
numbers
of problems Fix the agreement mistake
number
such
as increase
in criminal activities, constant traffic jams and many more .Add an article
an increase
the increase
Therefore
, this
aspect has both positive as well as
negative developments.Submitted by akshayashvi07 on
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