In many countries goverments are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of goverment money?

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the governments
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which I think it is fine
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about bad accidents in countries and the world like
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goverments
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public places.
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feel angry when having to spend more money to buy cameras,
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some
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in their houses, or more
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goverments
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governments
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, and especially residents, so I think do not have any reasons to refuse that.
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