In many countries governments are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government money?

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A huge proportion of
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budget is allocated to providing people with easier access to the
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. There are several reasons for
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spending and, in my view,
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is not the most suitable way to use state money. The government understand how the
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benefits the lives of their citizens and
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the limitation of access to the
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in a number of places across their countries. The
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has proven powerful in dispensing educational services and general knowledge about all aspects of life,
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the fact that it could facilitate communication between even continents. There is no arguing why governments pay much heed to the development of the
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, just
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to boost the
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quality of life for their people.
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, perhaps the inaccessibility of the
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in many areas, especially disadvantaged ones for which mountainous villages in Vietnam could be brought up as a prime example, has the government draw a conclusion to pour their money into improving the
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. Much as those analyzed points above, I still believe large financial spending on
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a field could, sometimes, be seen as unproductive or even counter-productive. In fact, only half of the
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population has
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connection; and even if the government were able to expand the
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, it would be, I believe, hardly reachable for the rest of the world for the time being. The result would not be equivalent to the enormous amount of governmental funding.
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, there are some other areas that authorities could invest in as a pre-requisite complement before supplying a widespread
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. Constructing schools and deploying qualified teachers to areas that are used to the absence of the
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and are unaware of the benefits it might offer could be more promising. In conclusion, there are two main explanations for governments’ special attention to improving
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access; and I think
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is not the most optimal way to spend money.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital transformation
  • service delivery
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • tech-savvy
  • contemporary lifestyle
  • public satisfaction
  • data management
  • smart city technologies
  • predictive policing
  • data privacy
  • digital divide
  • inclusivity
  • governance
  • infrastructure
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