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Nowadays most of the crimes are done by youngsters what are the causes of this and what solutions can be taken??

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Today,
majority
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criminal
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of criminal
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 cases are done by young adults.
This
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about
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the reasons and
its
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possible solutions in
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 to tackle
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 problem. There are several reasons why
predominently
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predominantly
 crimes are
done
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 by
youths
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 today. One important reason is emotional instability. Because
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most
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youths
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 are still experiencing identity formation and emotional control. They are
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 likely vulnerable to negative effects and immature
decision making
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.
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, many young adults do suicide as self-criminal to themselves because they can not
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 their
emotion
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emotions
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.
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, many
youths
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 might
obtain
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 several pressures from their social environment.
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, sometimes,
this
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 phenomenon encourages them to do criminal cases.
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, today some youngsters do criminal
occupation
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occupations
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such
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 as being
a thieves
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a thief
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 in
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 to escape from economic
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 and to fulfill their daily requirements. In
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 to solve
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 problem, the
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 institutions, the government and stakeholders together can do several possible solutions.
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,
this
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 case can be
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 by conducting
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education
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an education
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 and coaching
program
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. Providing preferable
education
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 and impactful coaching will assist
to develop
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in developing
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 their social skills, cognitive ability and positive values.
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, conducting
counseling
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counselling
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 guidance to distribute and solve
student's
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students'
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 complaints,
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 to present wise advice in
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 to help them to pursue their future dream and career.
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, arranging
crime
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 prevention
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program
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programs
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 can contribute to
solve
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this
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 problem. Developing and supporting all
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kind
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kinds
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 of prevention
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program
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programs
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 of criminal which aim to enhance awareness about
crime
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 and its consequences.
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, local police stakeholders provide knowledge about the
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dangers
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 of
crime
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 In conclusion, the factors of why
mostly
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most
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 crimes are done by
youths
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 are
,
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apply
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 emotional instability and social and economic pressure. In
order
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 to deal with
this
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 case, there are possible solutions
are
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 conducting
education
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 and coaching and
also
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 arranging
crime
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 prevention
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program
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programs
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.
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