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Some believe that people are naturally born as leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
 argue that leadership abilities are inherent,
while
 others contend that life experiences can improve certain
skills
 in individuals.There is an opinion that
people
 are naturally born as leaders inherit some
skills
 or qualities genetically from their ancestors,
whereas
 others try to develop some
skills
 by focusing on them. On the one hand, with strong genes, some qualities and
skills
 tend to be passed down from generation to generation. Scientifically proven, that some children get 40%-50% of
the
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 talent from their parents. If the parents are the leaders, unavoidably their children would become leaders in the future thanks to inheritance and good genetics.
For example
, as the president of
Kazakhstan
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Mr.
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 Tokayev is a
leader
 and his children take high positions as well.
On the other hand
, other
people
 say that leadership
skills
 can be developed in intensive practice without inborn qualities. They can put themselves in a fast-track scheme to develop abilities
such
 as communication
skills
 or critical thinking,
consequently
 gaining a new skill that they can apply.
Furthermore
, there are more and more soft-skill and hard-skill courses online from around the world about becoming a
leader
.
For instance
, many companies organize workshops to make their workers
a
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leader
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. In my opinion, any skill can be mastered by putting
a
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little effort. So I think, if
people
 concentrate on their desired
skills
, they may be the best at it. In conclusion,
while
 some traits like intelligence or
articism
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 might be passed down through genes, becoming a good
leader
 doesn't just depend on what you're born with. It's more about practice and learning over time.
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task achievement
Ensure a clear and concise thesis statement that reflects your opinion early in the essay to guide the reader.
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Try to maintain a balanced discussion on both views before stating your opinion to ensure a comprehensive coverage of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words to enhance the flow of your essay and connect ideas more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Provide more detailed examples and evidence to support your points, enhancing the persuasiveness of your argument.
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Effective introduction of both perspectives on leadership abilities.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion ties back to the introduction, reinforcing your stance effectively.
coherence cohesion
Clear paragraph structure makes your essay easy to follow.

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