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some people think that children should only read academic book. other believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. Discuss both views and give your opi nion.

#people #children #book #books #pleasure #opi #nion
Nowaday
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,many
parent
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parents
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 think reading is good for their
children
.But different
type
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 of
parent
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parents
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 have
differen
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different
opinion
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opinions
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.Some of them think
children
 should only read academic
book
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books
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,and some of them believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. In my opinion,absolutely reading academic
book
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books
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 can let the kid know more academic knowledge.First,they can know more
word
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words
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,
also
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and also
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 understand professional knowledge like the
animals
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behavious
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behaviours
behaviour
,how
the
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plant
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plants
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 grow up and how the world
working
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.It can improve their academic literacy.
Although
,
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apply
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academic
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academics
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 is really
usefully
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,
but
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actully
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actually
 if the
kids
 do not curious
on
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about
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 it,it is hard to put the
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 deeply
in to
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thie
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their
brain
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brains
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. It the other side,I think reading books for
pleasureis
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pleasure is
pleasure
pleasures
 more important for
kids
.Because the
chrildren
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children
 can
chose
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 what they want to read,so they think they have the right to choose.That
make
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kids
 feel
satisfy
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,
it
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apply
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 helps psychological development and
make
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makes
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emotionally
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them emotionally
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 healthy.
Also
 reading what the
kids
 like,
it
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apply
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 might
development
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 their
hobbtes
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hobbies
.They can read all kinds of
book
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books
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,
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and in
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in
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at
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 the
end
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end,
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 they will know what they
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are interest
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interest
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 in.At that time,
parent
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parents
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 can help
children
 develop their
stengths
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strengths
.
This
 can make plans for the
children
's future. So,I think the content of academic books is
imporant
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important
.But it is more important to meet
children
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children's
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 interests.
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Coherence & Cohesion
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Task Achievement
Incorporate more specific examples to support your arguments, which could make your points more persuasive.
General
Pay attention to spelling and grammar to ensure clarity and professionalism in your writing.
Structure
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively framed your discussion.
Content
You discussed both views as the prompt requested before providing your own opinion, demonstrating a good understanding of the task.

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