The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
The line graph represents
amount
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the amount
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of changes and
type
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the type
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of
junk
food
consumed by Australian teenagers
bewteen
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between
1975 and 2000. Type of
junk
food
such
as Pizza and Hamburgers was increasing
bewteen
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between
1975 and 2000. Fish and Chips was discreasing
bewteen
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between
1975 and 2000. In 1975, Fish and Chips was 100
times
per
year
. for eaten per
year
.
Then
, it was
discreasing
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decreasing
to 1980,
times
near by 80 per
year
.
However
, it was
slight
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increasing
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in 1985.
Therefore
, it was
subsantial
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substantial
discreasing
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decreasing
increasing
in 2000.
Junk
food
about
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Pizza and Hamburgers was increasing
bewteen
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between
1975 and 2000.
Junk
food
of Pizza in 1975 was
near by
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0
time
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times
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per
year
.
Then
, it was
subsantial
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substantial
substantially
increasing to 1995 about 80
times
per
year
.
Also
,
Junk
food
of Hamburgers in 1975 was
near by
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nearby
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0
time
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times
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per
year
.
Then
, it was
subsantial
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substantial
substantially
increasing to 2000. In 2000, it was increasing for 100
times
per
year
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words junk, food, times, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Dip
  • Steady growth
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Consumption patterns
  • Fast food
  • Processed snacks
  • Health consciousness
  • Marketing influence
  • Demographic factors
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Nutritional education
  • Epidemiological impact
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