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Some people believe that eventually all the jobs will be done by artificial intelligence. What is your opinion?

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There is a common opinion that because of AI, the traditional
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 would be withdrawn.
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, I entirely disagree with
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 statement. In my opinion, technology cannot be fully responsible for every single task.
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, there are some significant abilities that it will never possess.
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 with, high-tech solutions require detailed control through the whole ongoing process consisting of production, implementation and evaluation. Clearly, it should not be regulated by itself. Despite giving
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full authority to robots, we should use the chance to create new jobs and maintain the feeling of safety.
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, increasing the
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 of
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specialisations
 in the sector will not only ensure we govern what we
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 to the workforce well
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 but
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 fill the gap that AI arises.
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, it is
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 mentioning that there are certain soft skills which are much better developed by humans.
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, individual
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 based on empathy, observation of
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 world, and perception, followed by experience are still recognised as computer
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disadvantages
. It leads me to the belief that
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uniqness
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uniqueness
 and creativity
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 superior
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 digitalization is growing.
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, some think that upgrading IT solutions will bring us to the point when there will be no place for people in firms.
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, there are things which humans would always do better. I strongly support that we should not be
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afraid
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 of new software ideas, since as humans we are likely to develop new
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career
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career
 paths,
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, use our outstanding skills that are not in any danger of replacement.
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