The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
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The charts illustrate the changes that took place at West
Park
Secondary
School
in 1950, 1980, and 2010.  
Overall
, a comparison of
three
Correct article usage
the three
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maps reveals a complete transformation of the
school
.   In the year 1950, there were 4 blocks. First of them were houses,
then
it was constructed as a car
park
united with the Science
Block
in 1980.
Then
, in 2010, the car
park
's area expanded
while
the science
block
remained the same. Turning to the second
block
, it was a
school
near the houses. In 1980, it became the main building of the
school
, and in 2010, it experienced no changes.
Regarding the
Change preposition
The
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third
block
,
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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was farmland in 1950.
Then
, it was rebuilt as a sports field in 1980. After that,
Sport
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Sports
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Field's building condensed because of the car
park
's expansion. The fourth
block
, named Playground, remained the same area in 1950 and 1980,
while
in 2010,
this
area was reduced.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school, block with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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