The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

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The charts illustrate the changes that took place at West

Park

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Secondary

School

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in 1950, 1980, and 2010.

Overall

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, a comparison of

three

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the three

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maps reveals a complete transformation of the

school

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. In the year 1950, there were 4 blocks. First of them were houses,

then

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it was constructed as a car

park

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united with the Science

Block

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in 1980.

Then

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, in 2010, the car

park

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's area expanded

while

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the science

block

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remained the same. Turning to the second

block

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, it was a

school

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near the houses. In 1980, it became the main building of the

school

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, and in 2010, it experienced no changes.

Regarding the

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The

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third

block

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Correct pronoun usage

apply

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was farmland in 1950.

Then

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, it was rebuilt as a sports field in 1980. After that,

Sport

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Sports

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Field's building condensed because of the car

park

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's expansion. The fourth

block

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, named Playground, remained the same area in 1950 and 1980,

while

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in 2010,

this

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area was reduced.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school, block with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

154 words

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The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Many people believe that modern technology has brought people together but other say it has driven us apart. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

The main purpose of a university is to provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed for students to get a good job. To what extent do you agree?