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In some countries, there is not enough recycling of waste materials (e.g. paper, glass, and cans). What are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem?

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Recycling of
waste
materials
 is something
that is
 important for the health of our world and our climate. But not all
contries
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countries
 recycle their
waste
materials
, why is
this
? First and
formest
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, the main reason why countries
does
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do
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 not recycle their
waste
materials
 is because of
finiciall
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financial
 causes. To
developp
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develop
 a working recycling system costs a lot of
money
. Studies
shows
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 that countries that
reycles
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recycles
recycle
 the least are often the poorest ones. They may not have the economic
possibilites
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possibilities
possibility
 to prioritise
recyling
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recycling
,
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 and
instead
 have to spend their
money
 on the
well being
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 of their
residens
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residences
.
Secondly
, the people living in
the
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these
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contries
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countries
 may not feel motivated to recycle. In
comparsion
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comparison
 with
trowing
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throwing
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 everything in the trash,
recyceling
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recycling
 your
waste
materials
 can feel like a complicated process. A
soulution
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solution
 to
this
 problem
,
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 would be to
encurage
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encourage
 the
pepole
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people
 living in the
contries
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countries
 to
recyle
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recycle
. In
Sweden
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Sweden,
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 they have managed to do
this
. They have
developped
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developed
 a system for recycling especially
aliminium
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aluminium
 cans, where you earn
money
 for ever can you recycle.
Then
 you buy,
for
example
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 a can of
coca cola
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Coca-Cola
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, you pay extra for it. That extra
money
 that the cola
costed
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 you, you get back by recycling it. To
conclued
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conclude
, there are a lot of reasons why some
contries
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countries
does
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do
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 not recycle their
waste
materials
. It can be because of economic causes or
simlpy
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simply
 because of lazy residents. But there are changes that can be done to
encurage
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encourage
this
,
such
 as the Swedish system. Earning
money
 for recycling would motivate the
pepole
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people
 in the
contrie
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country
 to do it more.
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