erTelevision serves many useful functions. It helps people to relax. Besides, it can also be seen as a companion for lonely people. To what extent do you agree with this? Explain why with your own experience.
In recent years our
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brodcasting Correct your spelling
satellite
channel
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channels
are
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have
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spread
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because
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programmes
in
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on
television
after the busy schedule of the day people
gets
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get
the
relaxation and feel happy , I Correct article usage
apply
am totally
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totally stand
stand
with Verb problem
agree
this
article and my perspective of
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on
this
topics
elaborating my own experience.
first Fix the agreement mistake
topic
due to
some programe
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programme
in
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on
television
, makes people
discipline
to come Wrong verb form
disciplined
home
on time for example
if in
the Change preposition
on
television
at 6 pm there is T20
cricket match scheduled Correct article usage
a T20
then
I will be home
before 6pm, due to
this
early in home
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the home
a home
then
usual days this
will benifits
to my family member to make sit together and enjoy the cricket match and evening snacks.
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benefit
benefits
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those who are staying in Add a comma
secondly,
city
area far from Correct article usage
a city
the
family, after Change the word
their
the
work Correct article usage
apply
television
is the
friend for them because once they reach Change the word
their
home
they fell
tired and Correct your spelling
feel
lonliness
, to eradicate Correct your spelling
loneliness
this
situation most of
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apply
the
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apply
people
turn on their TV or other entertainment gadget
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another entertainment gadget
other entertainment gadgets
hence
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attachment
with their family. and some Add an article
an attachment
people
are addicted to web series for the reason they will follow strictly
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strict
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relieve
the
work and trying the reach Correct article usage
apply
home
as soon as early .
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is shown
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an urban
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the
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apply
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are involved
the
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facing
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trouble
home
on time and after reaching home
their mind relaxation option is only the
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apply
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. Correct your spelling
programme
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that Correct your spelling
Besides
rular areas
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local
people
those involoving
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involved
with
heavy work and they need Change preposition
of
resting
bed as their friend after dinner Correct article usage
a resting
instead
of television
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