graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018

graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018
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The line graph illustrates the total number of shop closures and opening of new shops in a specific country between the years 2011 and 2018.
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, it can seen that the highest number of closures happened in the
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2015
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, openings were fewer by the end of the period. On one hand , openings of retail shops were around 8500 in the
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2011 but drastically dropped in the next
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2012 to 4000 and stood up to 6000 in
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2014 , but stable between 2015 and 2017 4000, before it dropped to 3000 in 2018.
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, the number of store closures was approximately 6200 in the
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2011, slightly dropping in the following
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and rising to 7100 in 2013 but a significant decline in 2015 from 6500 to around 300 . Increase 5100 in the next
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, maintained stead between 2016 to till the end of 2018 with 5100.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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