Nowadays,environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual person's or individual countries in other words it is an international problem.To what extend do you agree or disagree.
Now,environmental problems are
so
vast to be managed by Rephrase
too
people
or some individual countries
.It is also
global
Add an article
a global
problem
.This
essay is about environmental issues and their reasons.In cutting-edge world has a lot of troubles because there are chemical farms and diverse companies
everywhere.
On the one hand,this
problem
to
be managed by individual persons and their technologies.The humans who build some futuristic buildings Add a missing verb
is to
nonetheless
,they
cut many trees.So,nature has been deforested by Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
.In addition
,the venomous air
is emitted by some chemical companies
and the air
effects
for Correct your spelling
affects
environment
.In fact,Tashkent is capital
of Uzbekistan,it has many Correct article usage
the capital
companies
,farms
and it is the messiest city in the world.Correct word choice
and farms
Besides
,this
fact is very bad for people
in Uzbekistan.The nauseating stench air
spread everywhere and plants grow badly.Change preposition
of air
This
is a global problem
.
On the other hand
,environmental problem
is not all
Change preposition
in all
countries
.Some countries
use chemical companies
however
, they plant a lot of trees and this
way keep green nature.In addition
,we reduce hazardous air
for environment
.The prime example of how Add an article
the environment
this
scheme work
is Switzerlandʼs nature.In Correct subject-verb agreement
works
this
country is civilization
country and its Replace the word
a civilised
environment
is very beautiful,inchanting
because they use diverse natural things.
Correct your spelling
enchanting
To sum up
,I partly agree
Add the preposition
agree on
agree to
agree with
this
point. Environmental problems to
be managed by some Add a missing verb
are to
people
or also
many countries
.It is a global problem
.The big cause environmental
issues are Change preposition
of environmental
people
and they build technologies.Besides
,we prevent use
Correct article usage
the use
plastics
and chemical things for Change preposition
of plastics
environment
.Add an article
the environment
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Task Achievement
Consider expanding on your examples by providing more detailed evidence or studies that support your points. This will help strengthen your arguments and provide a clearer link between your examples and the overall argument about environmental issues being a global problem.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on your essay structure to include a clearer introduction and conclusion. Your introduction should more directly address the essay question, and your conclusion should summarize your main points and state your position more strongly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to organize your paragraphs more logically, ensuring that each one focuses on a single main idea. Use topic sentences to introduce the main idea of each paragraph, and use linking words to smoothly transition between ideas.
Task Achievement
You provided examples that support the idea that environmental problems require a global solution, such as the situation in Tashkent and Switzerland.
Task Achievement
Your essay shows an understanding of the complexity of environmental issues, acknowledging that different countries have different approaches to handling them.
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