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The table and pie show the total value and sources of fish imports to the UK from 1990 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table and pie show the total value and sources of fish imports to the UK from 1990 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The table
represents
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shows
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 the amount of
the
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apply
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money spent on purchasing
fish
 in 1990, 1995, and 2000 in the UK,
while
 the pie chart illustrates the nations including
Canada
,
Japan
, and other
countries
 where these came from during the given period.
Overall
, the amount of money for importing
fish
was
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apply
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increased steadily during the given period,
however
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however,
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Japan
 increased
fish
 sales towards the UK dramatically
amlost
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almost
 2 times. In 1990, the money spent on importing
fish
recorded
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was recorded
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 as 6.5 billion
founds
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funds
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 and the majority of its sources were
Canada
 and other
countries
 evenly. In 1995, expenditure for buying
fish
 was represented as 7.5 billion
founds
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pounds
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, mainly importing
fish
 from other
countries
. In 2000, the figure spent
for
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on
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fish
 importing was recorded
the
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as the
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hightst
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highest
 number which was 10.5 billion
founds
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funds
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 and other
countries
 were still
dominet
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dominate
dominant
 followed by
Japan
 and
Canada
. In conclusion,
Japan
 rose their proportion sharply
where
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whereas
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Canada
 and other
countries
 lost their market shares.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, canada, japan, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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